Hopeful
We strolled the beach one summer night,
my lady friend and I,
beneath the stars that twinkled bright,
like diamonds in the sky.
She said she loved the ocean view,
"I love it,too," thought I,
but I misspoke, and "I love you",
instead, was my reply.
She stopped and did a double-take,
her face appeared to flush;
then, realizing my mistake,
I too began to blush.
Embarrassed at my contretemps,
I quickly made amends,
for she had long insisted on
our being only friends.
But as we walked along the sand,
she gave a hopeful sign,
when, slow but sure, I felt her hand
slip softly into mine.
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Wow....I LOVE IT
The simplicity, the good picture, the happiness and hope it gives, every single morsel of words you feed. It is amazing. You give a good setting, characters we can live, and everything possible anyone can ask in this type of poem, in my opinion.
Thank you regisp6
I think it's a very uplifting poem. I wish we had more like it. Glad you liked it.
wow this is such a
wow this is such a beautiful..cute lovely poetry..something you can read over and over and yet will retain its beauty..a masterpiece
Thank you mimi
You're too kind, but i'm glad you liked it.
Adam, I totally agree with
Adam, I totally agree with regisp6 and mimi...This is so sweet and heartfelt. I absolutely love it. A poem of hope! It almost makes you want to finish the ending... and have them get married after all ....
Linda
:)
Thank you Linda
I think it's better to stop the poem just where it is, on a promising note. The third and fourth stanzas need to be re-written, but I like it and I'm glad you did, too.
this was
Beautiful Adam
I really liked this one, a lovely poem well written with a happy ending. big hugs from Willow
Best poem
I've read today! Superb. Simple thoughts created deep from the heart. Quality stuff. To get one this good after so long a wait since the last one! More please! :-)
awwesome
Wow, great lyrics! Very meaningful, yet cute! And like your other poem I read, I love the rhythmic quality to it. It could very easily be made into a song, like your other poems. I love your style.
T. J. Blankenship