Their Kiss
I always turned away in order to miss,
The moment their lips meet in a kiss,
So I won’t have to see that display
Of love as warm as any summer day.
But once I turned around to slow,
And had to face what I wished not to know.
He leaned over and she put her hand in his hand
With a happiness that I will never have nor understand.
I watched their fingers leisurely intertwine,
And cursed the thought I’d never be able to call him mine.
The way their noses so gently touch,
And how they love each other so very much.
It rips my poor soul apart
And pulls at the strings of my heart,
To watch her eyelids flutter in delight,
As he draws her closer and holds her tight.
With their eyes closed they see only each other,
And have justly vowed to never leave another.
I look at them like a car wreck on the highway,
Too painful to watch, but to horrible to look away.
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Truely Marvelous
You have capture a moment in time when we truely felt that the one you love is not loving you, but to another. When I read this piece, each line just break my heart.
Great Poem
remind me of the one that got away...
Their kiss
Hey,
I have not looked into this site for about two weeks now. My mother had a harsh heart attack and she got operated on. I spent nights in the hospital. I saw so many people suffering there.
I hate giving advices and I hate taking them too. It is probably the last time I have given an advice to you. You are a talented person. Really you are. There are so many things in the world which need our help and are worth writing about, caring about. Look around you. You critising talent as well as sharp poetical gift could help unmask hypocrasy, cruelty, injustice reigning over the world.
Very sorry for interfering. I will never do that again.
Wishing you all the best in your life
If you were sorry about the advice (which you shouldn't be)
Youl wouldn't have posted that comment if you really didn't want to give advice, but you weren't interfering. You simply responded to what I said, and stated your own oppinion. I'm glad you did Ruslan, every viewpoint is a new one when it comes from someone who's words you vaule
With all sincerity,
--The Bleeding Bridesmaid
Hey
to Ruslan:
I don't really see you as interfering or anything like that. The annoying part of letting someone to read your poem is that they tend to take over your poem. I.E, "No, no, no. Third line is completely wrong, you need to take the words 'dream' out because it is too cliche." Now that is interfering. Giving advice merely mean giving suggestion, i.e. "The third stanza truely capture the meaning of the poem, but it feel as if you are leaving out the sun in that stanza. I don;t know whether it is your intention or not.".
The way I see is that you are interfering whatsoever and giving advice is good, but just not to the point where you start taking over the other person writing.