Best friend, Worst friend

Elaine smiled with me very widely
She shared a lunch at a party
Would flatter me every time we met
We together went to the greatest fetes
I received a gift for my birthday
Will check for a house call when I'm away
An invitation at Christmas time
Gave me best wishes, we went and lime
For Carnival we jumped in a band
We held on to each others hands

No one did ever like Emily
A disrespect to her family
I hate a lot of obscene words
Will quarrel like a turkey bird
In rage and drinking all the time
An alcoholic,that,the sign
She dresses up in a nude way
Not true to her husband she will get pay
Making a confusion by a club
After that you'll see a mob

Elaine left me when I fell down
She pretended she heard no sound
A woman came and showed she care
She called for help she was sincere
There was a hand who was holding me
While on a bed it was Emily
She once stripped for my handsome man
Still she held on to my weak hands
Forgiveness is what she asked for
I forgave Emil, I thanked her more
Elaine she wasn't there
To show how much she really care
Emily stayed till i recover
Emily is my friend forever

'Your best friend can be your worst enemy!''
'your worst enemy can be your best friend!'

Brenda

You have committed the cardinal sin of poems with a rhyme scheme. You stretched real far and wide to force some of the rhymes. When this is done in a piece it makes the reading and enjoying of it very difficult for the reader. Using rhyme is a very tricky thing and I feel that you have some work ahead of you when it comes to perfecting its use.

Pete

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