Blow Flowers

Blow Flowers

Small and oh so yellow
tiny suns at first
Then pale milky moons
Until the vapor seeds
mount the breeze
New Life
Ever seeking another place

Nice!

Dinali

I love the delicate descriptioins, the metaphors used are also very well. One point I would like to comment on though is that the poem could use some punctuations.

Good luck :).

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