Her Gentle Sway on Valentines Day

Seeps through my head,
& pulls me this way,
Unconsciously following,
That gentle sway.

Yet cold stares dismiss
This fanciful craze,
I crave for her kiss
Past the frozen out greys.

So much more I could hold
with a lot less affray.
But she touches my sleep
& captures my days.

With constant thy fear
My caught breath will hold,
That her love elsewhere
Would be injustice untold.

See my spent heart tear
For what it cannot hold.

Plentiful these kisses-
-But just one holds my wishes.

For she sweeps through my dreams,
& pulls me her way,
Unconsciously following,
Her gentle sway.

'Past The Frozen Out Greys'

I was really moved by this expression.

I liked the way you have written this piece.

Debs

word choice

very good diction. i liked it a lot. the flow was very nice, and althoguh the title turned me off a little because i am antii-valentine's day, it was very good and served the title better than i expected.
i hope to read more of your work
lynz

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