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Crash

Posted March 24th, 2008 by David Gibbs

A spattering,
Light, misty rain
Stipples my screen,
Glistening droplets
Hypnotise,
Exquisite jewels
Luring me to the rail,
I wait for your scream.

WOW!

On March 24th, 2008 Scareysquirel says:

Dave. Great poem! and very dark indeed. I loved the descriptions you used here and it really took me along on the journey. What i drew from this piece, was that the rain was a distraction to the driver, as you imagined the beautiful rain drops hypnotising you, and taking your attention from the road. 'Luring me to the rail' was the only bit that left me guessing in this write and i kept thinking of a train.

A brilliant piece Dave.

Debs

Thank You

On March 24th, 2008 David Gibbs says:

Thank you Debs, your interpretation of this piece is good! 'Luring me to the rail' is meant to relate to the barriers along the side of a motorway, now you've mentioned it, I can see that perhaps that line doesn't quite fit this piece. Thanks for commenting and for taking the time to read, always good to hear what you think, many thanks
Dave

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