once upon a time...
once upon a time
there used to be love,
used to be a smile.
we used to be generous
used to be kind.
once upon a time
we used to laugh,
used to joke.
we used to play
once upon a time
we used to feel
we used to bless,
used to say-
'i love you'
and
'thank you'
...
we used to have hearts.
once upon a time
we used to cry
we used to share
used to care,
used to say..
'I'll be there for you'
once upon a time
there used to be life.
once upon a time
we used to be alive!
once upon a time. . .
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sad
This makes me sad:(
Hmmm..
If the poem makes you sad for being so badly written. . .Then it's a sorry from my part. But if the feel of it makes you sad..then I would say Thanks..even I felt the same when I wrote it yesternight.. Then my purpose is done.
- rupam
It is the writings content
It is the writings content that makes me sad not the writing itslef. Your poem does a good job of making the reader feel what you were feeling when you wrote it. If I had thought it poorly written then I would have said so. I like this poem, because it does make you feel sad.