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I Knew Her Well

Posted July 5th, 2008 by dolanf

I Knew Her Well

Last night we said
Our last goodbye
I didn’t fight
She didn’t cry
“Paalam”, she said
As she closed the door
I didn’t say goodbye
Adieu, DON’T GO!

This summer madness
Has been put to rest
It didn’t go through fire
Didn’t face the test
Of living a life
Of regimented days
Where time spoken for
Is months away

A one night stand
That lasted too long
Fuelled by desire,
Music and song
Nobody lost
And nobody won
Everything’s forgotten
Under the eastern sun

I’ll pack up my bags
And board that plane
Sober and thoughtful
Incredibly sane
But in my memory
There will remain
Fragments of her
Recalled in pain

Dolan Fernandes
July, 2008

Extremely intelligent and well written

On July 5th, 2008 ErgoIgoUgo2 says:

Dolan,

You have more than one turn of phrase in this piece that brings the story straight home and sets the piece apart from lesser efforts. I am pleased that I had the opportunity to read and will be seeking out more of your wisdom in other pieces.

Well done,

Pete

I knew Her Well

On July 5th, 2008 dolanf says:

Pete,

I think my heart was speaking here, and got it right, first time.

Thank you for those kind words

Dolan

No need for thanks

On July 5th, 2008 ErgoIgoUgo2 says:

Dolan,

It was my distinct privilege to have read this piece.

Pete

Good Write Dolan

On July 5th, 2008 willow says:

this was a very good write, sad, and heartfelt, a very touching poem but nobody can take your memories away from you hugs from Willow

Thanks Willow

On July 5th, 2008 dolanf says:

I notice that its only when I feel that I can write

Grateful for your kind words

Awesome

On July 6th, 2008 FreeSpirit says:

I really felt this one.I too am looking forward to more of your writting.

Gloria

Thanks Gloria

On July 8th, 2008 dolanf says:

I'm glad you appreciated this one, its special

Thanks

Good One

On July 25th, 2008 Wrong Virtu says:

Can I jump In with a "Good One?"
If not, then I leave one anyway.
I enjoyed reading this Mr. Fernandes
keep it up my friend
For all it's worth...

Thanks

On July 25th, 2008 dolanf says:

I'm glad you appreciated this work of mine. I'm grateful for feedback, and for the time taken to read and comment on my offerings.

Peace,

Dolan

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