it will be okay
The waves crash beside me
The seashells on the shore
I look out to the sunset
And hope for something more
I wish for you beside me
Nothing more
Nothing less
The stars are in the sky now
But I'll close my eyes and rest
I open my eyes and wish for your presence
But I don't beleive it will happen
I drift away into a deep sleep
As I lie on the beach
The sunrise awakes me
And as I awake
You suprise me
I see you standing
Over me
I ask you why you are here
And you answer
"Because i am your friend"
And you lay down and we fall into a peaceful slumber
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A Story
I love how this poem tells a story, shows emotion and dreams, and yet has a peaceful mood. Very artisitc.
Just one thing--what happened to the rhyme scheme? You started off rhyming, and very well I might add, and then it sort of slipped into free verse. If you're going to do that, I would separate the stanzas so we know there is a change in the poem.
Otherwise, the poem was excellent.
The stars shine brightly upon your talent, lighting your way enough to write by and guiding you to a future of success.
Wow, that sounded that a philosophical fortune cookie...sorry about that...
wInTeR rOsE
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i rhymed at the begining....? i didn't realize i do that sometimes even when i speak... i find it strange... have you ever noticed... i'm guessing no...i think i am the only one who has...
Kat
p.s. i agree with the whole fortune cookie thing...
HI Kat
I like this poem very much. Excellent wording used. Sometimes you loose rhyme when you use these extra special words although they add to the poem itself. I find I manage to keep my rhyme but lack those extra special words.
Well done I liked it, keep your pen flowing you are gifted.
Angel
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Awesome poem; all of your pieces are so artistic I am a big fan of yours. :).
thanks
thank you angel and epitome for your commments...
Kat