Four Limericks -- Comments ?

There once was a shark from Birch Bay
Who sat and watched people all day
He once was so brave
As to swim up and wave
Before they all floundered away.

There once was a boy from Saint Paul;
Too shy to be verbal at all;
He once was so dim
As to speak on a whim
Before melting back into the wall.

There was a young fellow named Chase
Who wore a mask over his face
It was quite the task
Just to get him unmasked
Without wrinkling your nose in distaste.

There was a cowboy from Seattle
Who happily mounted his saddle
He galloped about
With a bray and a shout
To find he had scared off the cattle.

Four limericks

I like these very much and you choose great descriptive words. just a little point though. It may be better not to use 'once' in the same verse repeatedly. I think this interupts the flow of the poem. (just my little nit pic).
my favourite verse is the fourth because it contains great wit.
Looking foward to your many other works and thankyou for my feedback.
Deborah

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