The Feeling of Perfect

I see your outer beauty, every detail of it
The fairness of your skin, the smoothness of it
Every blemish enhances, not diminishes
Hmm, is that love spell that fills the air?

Closing my eyes, I see beyond the skin you’re in
Something more beautiful, something seductive
Not a different side, but an inner side
I am attracted to this even more

I reach out and touch your soul, it doesn’t let go
I lean forward and kiss your heart, it returns the favor
I now realize that nothing can replace this
Nothing can replace this feeling of perfect

(c) 2007 by Gerard C. Johnson

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some constructive criticism

this is a pretty poem, but it doesn't read very smoothly. i also have a problem with the first two line that end the same, maybe you could change that? i'm sure if you work on it some more it could become beautiful.

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