Central frost...

Outer core...
the sun revolves
around my heart's galaxy
at times I become my own night
as I cloud my day away

Inner core...
I am half way out
yet I crawl back in
a hesitation of wits and wiles
could I ever win

Central frost...
the centre within my earth
I am frozen
hurting while numb
icy sun rises
will I ever thaw

nice, different, unique...

oldaspirationsneverdie...7
Great descriptive language and phrasing give this piece power
that gives rise the microcosm and macrocosm, the individual and
his world, the individual versus nature. It is a very interesting
poem due to the originality of the descriptive language, the
unique pharasing and choice of words, "the centre within my earth"
joins the individual to nature!

:)

Thank you for such a wonderful comment...your time is muchly appreciated...

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