Screaming
Why the silence
Never lasts
Echoes of voices
Of my past
No escaping
Constant torment
Screaming and screamimg
No relent
Wanted to die
Just get away
Storm in the mind
Continues to rage
Better off dead!
They chatter aloud
Screaming they said
Your end is now!
copyright 2008 vic duna.
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Suggestions...
This is a very good poem! Might I make a couple of suggestions? Consider revising:
Line 2: Never last to Never lasts
Line 11: The storm in mind to The storm in my mind or Storm in my mind...maybe
The changes would make those lines a little less awkward.