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Telescopes

Posted February 8th, 2008 by JaySayChao

I took a look inside,
I see myself wealthy,
My body healthy,
I live in a mansion,
My own corporation,

I took a look inside,
I see my beautiful wife,
Two babies in my life,
I’m loved by a loyal lady,
Two babies calling me daddy,

I stop looking inside,
All my visions suddenly die,
Back to reality,
No love around me,

When I look into telescopes,
I visualize dreams and hopes…

I like but would change the

On February 8th, 2008 Warren Peace says:

I like but would change the visualize to see
much stronger image and statement

Warren Peace

thanks

On February 8th, 2008 JaySayChao says:

thanks for your coment... and thanks for taking your time to read my poem. i would change it to a stronger statement, but i just cant think of any right now... thanks again.

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