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father

Posted April 9th, 2008 by joyce

my dad's first bonus!
it is a poor man's fortune
he owns just one suit
it's Christmas, so no question
he proudly buys two small bikes

© 2008 Joyce Greene (All rights reserved)

Great!!

On April 9th, 2008 David Gibbs says:

Joyce, really good work! Having read your pieces 'mother' and 'father' I think the Tanka form is well suited to you. In both pieces you managed to convey depth of feeling, love. family life, superbly. To give out such a story in just five short lines is talent indeed! Enjoyed reading both, look forward to more from you,
Dave

thank you, Dave

On April 10th, 2008 joyce says:

Your words mean a lot to me. I have you to thank for introducing me to this art form. I am becoming a bit of a fanatic about it. I also look forward to reading your poems from which I learn so much.

joyce

liked this one also Joyce

On April 9th, 2008 willow says:

another good one Joyce enjoyed them both Mother and Father. well written I must try this Tanka ,from Willow

thanks, willow

On April 10th, 2008 joyce says:

thank you so much for reading my poems and giving me positive input. It is hard to work in a vacuum. You are a good poet, and I look forward to reading your work. I think you might like this style.

joyce

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