My Ballet Dancer and You
My two favorite people...
My ballet dancer and you,
She's dressed in a pink tutu,
Some silver glitter scatters
From tiny dancing slippers.
She's happy so she giggles,
Your eyes meet hers and twinkle,
You're watching her try to do
What the teacher asks her to.
But she's only five years old
And can't do the things she's told,
"Tuesday's child is full of grace,"
But we haven't seen a trace.
© 2008 Joyce Greene (All rights reserved)
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sweet
sweet
thanks, mimi
Thank you for your nice comment on this poem. joyce
This is
really cute, I especially like the ending. raskin
thanks, raskin
I guess a lot of my poetry just calls out for funny (or wistful) endings, somehow. Thanks for the nice comment! joyce
Sentiments..
Lovely sentiments of love within the family. I wonder if this could be your sister's child? It reminds me of, my sister and her daughter who take ballet lessons, and brought a beautiful vision back to me of the little plays they sometimes do.
I noticed one thing, and hope you don't mind me saying-'happy' Should it be 'happily?'
A lovely write Joyce.
Debs
thanks, debs
No, though my sister did have a little girl and I had no living daughters - the one I lost during pregnancy may have been a girl. We all dream about having little girls. I would have loved to give her ballet lessons, as I took them as a child. I look at my picture with the ballet classs and can see the silver glitter beside our slippers. So beautiful!
I did mean happy not happily. The line could have read "She, happy, giggles" meaning she was happy, and so giggles instead of a description of how she giggled where you would say "She happily giggles." Maybe what I need is a comma after the "and" and before the "giggles". That might make it clearer. I'll try it out and see. Thanks for your input - good as usual!
joyce
lovely poem Joyce
I loved this one Joyce so cute well written and flowed well a great read hugs from Willow
thanks, willow
so glad you liked it! It seems to be a woman's poem since only women commented so far. Probably too frilly for the men. That's Ok cause I love frilly stuff! Thanks for the nice comment!
joyce
pretty in pink
I loved this one, Joyce. Every woman who has ever danced as a little girl or watched a child dance will appreciate the truth and humor here. -- MS
thanks, MS
yes, it's bittersweet...so many try and so few succeed! Oh well, we can dance with words!! Thanks for the nice comment!
joyce
Twinkle Toes
Joyce,
Your closing two lines were killer. Your sense of humor is not as warped as mine but it is just as sharp.
Pete
thanks, Pete
You're the first man to dare to comment on my girlish poem. I appreciate your comment on my humor.
Thanks again for the nice comment! joyce
ah!
The little darlings! Like it very much.
thanks, they are so adorable!
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
joyce
Loved the ending
I loved the ending of this Joyce, reminded me of a friend of mine who used to take her young daughter to ballet, she said she was as graceful as a baby elephant.
Andrew
I love your comment, Andrew
Poor little girl. Well, I hope they get that child into something she can do well at! Thanks for the nice comment, andrew.
joyce