Young, Hurtful Souls

Let's put ourselves in their shoes
Let's take time to understand why they act the way they do

They're tired
Tired of being surrounded by liars

Tired of seeing bags underneath my eyes
Developed from the lonely night cries

They're tired of being tired the next day from the night before
All from staying awake waiting for their mom to walk through the door

They're tired of feeling like nobody cares
Being alone, with no food to eat is too much to bare

Tired of what's suppose to be a home being a house
Of seeing parents play with their children while stuck on the inside looking out

Tired of wondering why do they have to suffer the pain
And be apart of life's hardest game

Tired of crying out when people see what's wrong
As if we don't hear the sad tune that's playing in their hurtful song

They yearn to be where they belong and desire to be
A place where they can feel good, happy, and stress free

Where they can smile, laugh, and play
But mostly, go home to a loving family at the end of each day

Many can understand

After reading this piece it made me think of all of the people in this world who have had unhappy childhoods brought on by poor or neglectful parenting. Your true pain came through quite clearly in this piece.

You have a couple of misspellings in this piece, you might want to go back over it.

Misspellings????

What word or words have I spelled wrong? Please point them out to me because I don't see them.

Misspellings?

What word or words have I spelled wrong? Please point them out to me because I don't see them.

Here You Go

moniqueo,

Here are the misspellings:

In line 1 of stanza 6 it should read "supposed" instead of "suppose"

In line 2 of stanza 7 it should read "a part" instead of "apart".

I hope that helps.

Pete

Here You Go

No, I meant to put what's in there the way it is. There's no mistake and no changes need to be made in my opinion because that's the way that I want it to be written.

Fine with me

Just tried to be helpful.

this is a sad piece, pain

this is a sad piece, pain comes thru,hopelessness too...thank you for sharing

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