My Love

Here love, take my hand and place it in yours
You be the waters and i'll be the shores
Take my head and lay it in the hollow of your neck
Ask not what will come next
Take my fingers and entangle them in your hair
Feel love that radiates like heat in this air
Take my body and i'll mold myself to you
We're only in this moment, to do whatever we want to
Take the air in my lungs; you're all that i need
Because you're the only catalyst that can make my heart beat
No need to catch my eye, love; you're all my eye can see
You're my newfound religion, because its you that i believe
And forget the time, you can have that too
Because i'd leave the whole world behind just to be entwined with you
If you be the waters, then i'll be the shores
I'd tell you to take my heart, love,...but its already yours

nellbel

great write love it
m weedon

GOD....

This is so great!! what a beautifully written poem. i love how the ending repeats from the 2nd line...makes all the sense in the world.
Sweet love poem!!!
Linda

thank you!

thanks for the feedback! i love to use lines from the begining and tie them back into the end...it just ties everything up in the way a new line sometimes cant. but thanks again i really appreciate it!

Loved The Way You Ended It

I'd tell you to take my heart, love,... but its already yours..

The verses sound more like a song than a conventional poem.. Have you thought of composing a tune around it?

Cheers,
Me

i appreciate suggestions!

i agree...it does sound a little like a love song but i wouldnt know how to turn it into one with a tune. i like music, but i wouldnt how to really go about writing a song. thanks for the suggestion though i always appreciate them! thanks!

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