Double (I wish I had)
I wish I had a double heart,
So I could love you twice as strong
For every weakness you outsmart
And every strenght that you prolong.
I wish I had two springs a year
So I could give you daffodills
For every time when you were near
To keep me safe from autumn chills.
I wish my pain was duble deep
So you could see how hard it was
To watch your foot-prints as you creep
Away from me, like April does.
I wish my voice would sound as two
And tear the sky to iron crocks
The moment when I scream to you
And watch you cross the border rocks.
I wish I had a double heart
To take me off the wormwood slough
And keep my puls as you depart.
A single heart is not enough.
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A tender heart for some is quiet!
I wish you had a donkey-pump
To push the blood in vessels tight
And hearkens he its loud thump
For a tender heart for some is quiet!
Saif U'Lah - 05 October, 2007
"A single heart is not
"A single heart is not enough."..i really like tt line. great line for the ending. impactful and moving.
double
Another gem. One certainly hopes you haven't experienced all the heartbreak you describe in your poems. The third stanza is particularly poignant.
DOUBLE (I WISH I HAD)
RSPAYNE
THERE IS A SENSE THAT YOU WANT TO LEAVE ALL YOUR WEAKNESSES BEHIND AND YOU'D
RATHER NOT BE IN TWO MINDS ABOUT ANYTHING.THE STRENGTH OF YOUR POETRY SEEMS
TO BE WEAKENING A RELATIONSHIP,AND YOU WANT YOUR LIFE TO BECOME MORE POETIC.
YOU NEED A KIND OF MORE REALISTIC ASPECT TO YOUR POEMS ,YET, YOU KNOW WHAT YOU'RE WRITING IS NOT REAL.YOU'D LIKE TO BRING YOUR DREAMS TO LIFE.
your poetry really is
your poetry really is beautiful and this is another excellent example. I love the way you are able to put certain emotions into words the way I aspire to but often fail.
double
This is a gem! So much feeling. Such a sensitive soul.