Triumph In The Snow
Come gentile snow, come,
Come back again,
Come here to coat the Earth
With your white sheet.
Here autumn lives.
Here autumn is
Fading away to death.
Thus autumn dies.
The Earth is marked.
The Earth dies soon,
As winter's reign begins
On Earth today.
The Snow is falling,
The Snow is falling
On this fallen Earth.
Cold winter claims the corpse.
A bird survives the cold.
A bird survives
Despite the cold.
A bird is singing in the cold.
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Not Nice
Apparently, no writer likes to be told their work is "nice". I don't usually like repetition in poems, but I didn't mind this one. I especially liked the last stanza.
I must support the last comment
Usually, I find this format a little stifling - "conforming" creative sensitivities. But the last 2 stanzas open the dimensions, so the Earth AND the bird are seen from a range of camera shots. It is then the poem rises with a unique voice!
Smiles and Light
AuraGem
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Repetition can be used for emphasis. Structure forces me to go in directions I did not anticpate. It uncovers new things in the material.