Laughter in the lagoon

In the lagoon Luis floated, lolling,
lamenting the belief of the laity.
His thinking a labyrinth.
A lackluster sky he looked at,
languishing in a languid landscape.
Lanky legs lie in the lake, limp.
A splash he heard, lifting his head, looking.
Later in the distance a ripple, then a laugh.
Silliness was not part of his lament, listening
again a lavish rich giggle erupted like a bubble.
He swiveled his launch another chortle,
leaving a smile where none had been.
Leaning he saw a smile and laughed,
a legend he looked at,
dipping his limb in the lake
a libretto loosened from his lips.
Finally liberated from the limp lucidity.
Seeing the light as luminous
the sky now glimmered.
Ending the litany of laments,
laughing at the literacy of lampooning,
literally.
Smiling he heard the lady giggle.
Luis was illuminated.

Great work

I loved this!

I see alliteration, imagery and comedy here.

Great work

Dolan

Glad you liked it

I appreciate the comments. I have fun writing this stuff and I'm glad if someone else likes it as well. raskin

Ok Now, Let Me See

Esther,

If I'm reading this right Luis learned to loosen up and laugh from the laconic Lady of the Lake and he left there loser and much more lanquid than he had arrived. Is tha about it?

Lefty

oh no Lars

he was singing a way different tune then the one he came with. The lady is a bit of a rascal. Thanks for reading. Emily

The question

for your lars is did he see his own smile or anothers smile? What changed him? emily

I don't know

Camille,

It's 5:48 in the morning on Monday and I am for the most part clueless...ok...I give up...what changed him?

Clifton

Naughty

Why did you not call me.
I love to learn to swim
Who saves whom
I wonder.

Now I think

this is an interesting comment. A labyrinth of thought, a circle, so you would fall in then? raskin

lol

who would not.
Smile.

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