Whispering light
The shadows hum within the trees
beyond the fire.
I listen intently to hear the vibration
of their song.
A language all its own, lost to time,
soft, whispering, light.
It could be the language of light itself,
speaking to me.
Fluffing up the grass, I lie down
shutting my eyes I sleep,
dreaming of brilliance.
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The shadows hum
Sonorous, metaphorical, paradoxical opening. In just 3 words, you have created a dramatic, sharp image drawing heavily on a synthesis of 2 of the senses.
The next power source is "fluffing". Delightful softness imbued in one word.
"dreaming of brilliance" - so wistful.
Smiles and Light
AuraGem
meditation
It's almost a trance like experience, a meditation. raskin
Wonderful piece.
Its a shame nobody will listen.
Peace and Love,
Frank
one
If one hears that's all that matters. raskin