HMM I WONDER
That's crazy,i wonder if
it could be the same girl..
So check it out,play along,
give this one a whirl..
Is your girl caramel skinned,
and sexier than a mofo?
Lips so sweet,it hurt when you
knew you couldn't kiss em no mo..
Does she smell so good to you,you
just wanna(breath)take it all in..
Don't you just wish you guys could
just go back to where you'd been..
The voice of an angel,does it make
you melt every time you hear it..
What you most want,doesn't it fuckin
kill you that you can't be near it..
Can she be so kool one moment,then
do a 180 and act like she don't care..
Does she lead you on just to shoot you
down,we both know that shit aint fare!
I guess they could be one in the same,
its sad we're in this fucked up spot..
You and i should just hang on to our pride and dignity,cause for now that's all we've got..
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I like this!
I like this a lot! It's witty and lyrical! Nice write!
thanks
thanks,im glad you liked it..I read yours,its really good..thanks for reading and you know your comments are always apreciated...Ricklovin
......nice
i lyked it a lot and enjoyed reading it a lot as i do with all of your poems but just ease up on the swearing man it can be quite offensive to some people.
im not being rude i just know through experience =D
however, as usual its verrry commical and personally i loved it ;-)
great write
snuggly bug .x.x.
ok
that was a reponse to dons comment,he wrote a poem very similar to mine,and said we might be in the same situation..then I commented back and from there I thought of this poem,spur of the moment really..sorry,I hope it doesn't offend anyone,but that's what poetry is about,being able to express freely what's on ones mind..i'll take it under consideration,and you weren't being rude,I apreciate you comments and your opinion...thanks for reading....Ricklovin
thnx
thnx for understanding Rick, i felt bad even writing it but i just thought i'd let you kno cuz ive had some really bad comments about some of my poems,
not that i didnt love the poem , it was hilarious and exciting
you must be really understanding and open minded not to take my comment badly, i knew you wouldnt mind -> thnx agen ;-)
p.s: i have no problem with it but i theres a few ppl on this site who deffo would =S
BTW : thnx for your comments on my poem, im soo flattered, i just wish i could write as well as you. your one talented, amazing writer :-)
snuggly bug .x.x.
no prob
I understand and think its cute you'd take the time to warn me,but I say if they don't like it,f&%k em lol jk..seriously though,I think any emotion your poem stirred up its still a good one to me....it made them think about it enough to leave a comment,even if it wasnt a very good one...it still made them react to it,and I think that's what writing is all about...thanks for lookin out snuggs,and thanks for the ego boost lol and for reading,im truly grateful.....thanks again......Ricklovin
hey
i like the flow.... and rick, dont stop with the cursing , i like it.it makes you who you are. and it shows the passion and anger and intensity of your poetry-mona-
ps: id like to know what you think of some of mine.im so curious
you're so right
it does make me who I am,and it definatly helps to describe what my feelings may be in a paticular poem...but I do get how some may be offended..i just hope they don't throw me off the site over it...Ricklovin
P.S-its like 3 in the morn now where I live,but I promise to read and give feedback on your work ok..and also,i'll be posting a poem tomorrow,I think you read and liked the first part...hope nobody gets to pissed cause its kind of raunchy lol...again,thank you so much mona...Ricklovin