Joe

I notice the way he moves
The way he sways

The way he eddies around his cane
Like a yappy dog in battle.

The way he touches the hand of a child
As a plastic plane is drawn
And smiles exchanged for a wayward...papery grin.

The way his skin
Licks up the madness from the sun's glaze
And eyes that have died and cried

A thousand ..different sorrows.

I notice the kind of his smile
And the wise of his heart
The holes in his boots that have journeyed past

Three or more..of my lifetimes.

I notice the cold; stale shell of his bones
That stench of ungodly breath

Yet am touched by the warmth
That preserves him.

© Deborah Gordon 2008

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liked that one Debs

this was a lovely poem caring and heartfelt well written Debs I enjoyed the read from Willow

how lovely indeed!

This poem is truely a pleasure to read.good write Debs

beautiful images of age

"the papery grin" and the "madness from the sun's glaze" - really impressive images. You look at things with your heart as well as your eyes, debs.

This is an especially good one!

joyce

Thankyou..

Thankyou all, for such kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.

DEbs :.)

A Great Write

Brilliant Debs, a joy to read!!
Dave

Thankyou Dave

Iv'e had so many kind comments on this one, i really appreciate that.

A human heart

A wonderful portrait Deb. You gave enough, and not too much, to paint the picture.

The closing line is perfect.

Mark Pearce
www.marzguy.deviantart.com

Thankyou

Thanks once again mark for reading and commenting. I'm kind of attached to this particular piece, I built up an empathy for the character Joe, even though he was fictional. I'm really pleased that this was well recieved.

Debs

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