Rough Draft

full to the brim with lies
and broken promises
which lead to false hopes,
and empty rooms through dark hollow doors

long walks in the shadow of darkness
towards nothing and away from everything
realizing you are standing still
waiting for your body to catch up with your mind

hot summer nights
cold summer sweats
mania of the mind
catatonic of the body

wishing wishing well
for yourself and others
wishing wishing hell
for yourself and others

crazy is as crazy does
time and time again
jump through hoops
smaller than you

dine fine on vodka rather than wine
stop
stay still
keep quite

sleep
even if you can not
thrash till your hearts content
or until your heart cant take it anymore

kill them
kill who?
don't question
just do what the voices tell you to do.....

Nice Write

I like this one alot, because it stands out and says something. I like how you've created the stanza breaks in this and the ending line is very well delivered.

Wow thanks a lot that means

Wow thanks a lot that means so much coming from someone who has been writing so long and who has been published. I can't really seem to get an opinion out of most of my friends since most of them don't like poetry or don't bother to take the time out to understand it.

Joie G Hartsfield

snorlaxer

This is such a great write. You had me all the way, totally into this poem. Very insightful to the topic.
Keep them coming .
You're really good!
Linda
:)

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