no more love

Slit my wrists and close my eyes,
Soon everything will be alright,
The fear of everything lost,
consumes my every thought,
To lose everything I love,
Soon I will be done,
Giving up the final fight,
All due to everything last night,
How can I go on,
With all my feelings gone?

first eight

i liked the first eight lines...but i think the last two would sound better if they were more "mature" sounding or more visual to follow teh rest...but good poem
lynz

I see...

I can agree with you on the last two... But I just ran out of words right at the end...
Kyu ~ (^^)v

Felt this

I feel the pain your words present...thanks for sharing!
Stay well, One love and God bless!

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