Falling Star
Personally I find my own poem rather repulsing, but I'll post it anyway, any comments are greatly appreiciated, in fact I'd really like to make it better, so PLEASE comment away.
Here it goes...
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I saw one tonight
I’ve seen them countless times
But tonight it was special
What do you do, when you see one?
Do you wish? Or do you cry?
Maybe simply reminiscence?
Life is something special
Something to be cherished
That one little star, has lived its life
And falls to the earth dieing
We wish upon death?
Do you wish for love?
How about a secret aspiration?
Do you share your desire?
Or hide it away in your heart?
I wished upon mine,
I’ll only tell only one person
The one I love with all my heart
I’ll tell him exactly what I wished for
On that tiny little falling star
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Im sorry to be mean.
Im sorry i know you dont like it, and comments are appreciated but i still feel guilty, but i have to be honest, it didnt capture me, and its too unoriginal. :\ and just to add to how much off a complete tosser i am being. i have to correct you when you said " I find my own poem rather repulsing" its Repulsive, not repulsing......im sorry i cant help it.