Until You Stop
You fight with me
I cannot fight with you
You do not let me
I am no match.
You steal my words
I have none left
You degrade my being
I haven't a chance
You shoot me down
I cannnot counter
You interrupt my argument
I cannot even stutter.
Why do you hurt me so?
In a way only you can do?
By fighting with me
And using that tone
And doing the things you do
You tear apart my soul
And it inflames
And I hold such an anger toward you
That the true point is lost
And I just want to fight you
Until I win
Until you stop those things you do
Until you stop looking at me through narrowed eyes
Until you stop reducing my stance to dust
And stop making me feel insignificant
Like I can never win.
I will fight
With a cause long lost
Long stolen
Long abused
Long given up,
With no hope
But so, so much anger
Until you stop.
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Have you checked out
Have you checked out splashhall?Really hope things get better for you...there isn't private messaging in here.
~all the magic of this world
dwells within you
an eternity of years
and its all you ever needed to know~
Yes, there is....?
There is private messaging--in a way. If you go to the blog, or account page (where you can see buddylists and whatnot), you can click "contact" and write a message that will send to my email. But this is good, too ]. No, I haven't checked out SplashHall, but I'll do that now. And what do you mean 'you hope things get better for me'? Are you saying this in regards to the poem? I would like your feedback, and also to know what you meant =]. Thank you for the view, though.
To live life, you must be able to understand it.
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I didn't mean anything about
I didn't mean anything about how you wrote this poem..it was about what you are going through,if this poem relates to your present life.Sorry that you misinterpreted what I was trying to say.It was a good poem and the private messaging well I still have'nt figured how to use it yet no biggy though....goodnite.
~all the magic of this world
dwells within you
an eternity of years
and its all you ever needed to know~
Ok,you know what I honestly
Ok,you know what I honestly think of this one...well comparing it to the other really awesome poems you wrote it did't quite stand up to them...and I don't really make comments where I just lie...you got a clue when i did't say anything about it in the first message...sorry if you got offended by this..but hope you understand.As I said before you're a really great writer who's still developing, as all writers are and there thousands and to stand out from those thousands well it's just not easy.All the best... I will continue to support you and comment on your poems..but you have to understand when or if I don't give you positive feedback...Christopher. ~all the magic of this world
dwells within you
an eternity of years
and its all you ever needed to know~
oh..
Wow...I had no idea you felt that way. I just wrote this poem because I was upset and needed to say what I was feeling to someone...aka everypoet. I'm sorry you didn't like it. I felt this poem did a lot of good for my soul, but if you found it unextraordinary, I apologize. I hope I will not disappoint you in the future. Thank you for your honesty.
Rain will soon fall, cleansing the earth for a new beginning.
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Good Job!
Great poem chicky!
I really liked it. Really sad...
But It was good.
I'm slowly but surely making my way down your list of poems that I want to read!
Love ya!
~Frizz~
=]
Thanks, Frizz. I'm pleased you found this to your enjoyment. It was kind of sad, wasn't it? Sorry, I didn't mean it to be. Thank you for commenting. It means the world to me =]
Let the dirt run through your fingers, and realize how much you really have.
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More
Ah, but this is just one of many...
MUWAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!
~Frizz~
Ummm...
*Cowers in fear*
Just kidding =]. Love ya, Frizz. I appreciate the comments! Bring it on!
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WinTer rOsE...
You are awesome! How awful it is to fight with the one you love. You start out as friends, become lovers...then enemies. It should never be that way. Whatever happened to "True romance?"
Or is there something here I'm missing? You become friends, you become lovers - and you stay that way. You don't become enemies. Why make an enemy of a friend? I don't get it. A friend recently turned her back on me, and I don't understand why. I love your poem...it touches my heart deeply, as do all of your poems!
I'm sorry =[
I apologize about your friend, tj. It is hard to turn your back on a friend, and it hurts terribly when it is done to you. I can see it from either perspective, unfortunately. You are so right about what you said. Why should you make an enemy of a friend? I guess time can be too cruel to us at times, forcing us down the river of life in different directions.
Thank you so much for your compliments. You are so nice to me, kind sir. I love reading your comments and what you have to say.
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