Love actually is

Like a ballet dancer in a musical box
Your image hasn’t yet leave the corner of my eyes
As if it was yesterday before the sun goes down
Thy sweet and bitter memories
Were the only treasures I had left
Not in a million years could I’ve find another person like you
Not even if I were to search across the seven seas
Like a hopeless child
I lost my way at the day you were gone
I can never express my feeling as a whole
For we are so far apart, can’t be seem
Even then, I can clearly remember how you used to undress me with your loving words
And tell me love is what we made of
Aw~ I wish I could turn back time
To fix all that little mistakes I had done
Aw~ I wish I could stand with you side by side
And tell you that everything would be all right
Still I want you to know
Even when the heaven tumbles, I’ll be here

nice write

I saw this write and it makes me think of someone who is so far away that I love.
I wish I could turn back time and bring back my love that moved away to Colorado.

Hey wolfy

You have some very nice things to say in this piece. You don't know me yet you'll find that many think of me as the resident editor. You do have some grammatical problems in this piece. Perhaps you're happy with them, if not I would be more than happy to help you out. It is your call.

Your buddy,

Pete

Morning wolfy

Below is your piece with my recommended edits, they are offered as free advice for you to take or ignore:

Like a ballet dancer in a musical box
Your image hasn’t yet (leave) the corner of my eyes…(Should be left)
As if it (was) yesterday before the sun goes down…(Should be were)
Thy sweet and bitter memories
Were the only treasures I had left
Not in a million years could (I’ve) find another person like you…(Should be I)
Not even if I were to search across the seven seas
Like a hopeless child
I lost my way(,) at the day you were gone
I can never express my feeling(s) as a whole
For we are so far apart, can’t be (seem)…(Should be seen)
Even then, I can clearly remember how you used to undress me with your loving words
And tell me love is what we (are) made of

Your friend,

Pete
Aw~ I wish I could turn back time
To fix all (that) little mistakes I had done…(Should be the)
Aw~ I wish I could stand with you side by side
And tell you that everything would be all right
Still I want you to know
Even when the heaven tumbles, I’ll be here

Many Thanks

Greatly appreciate your help Pete. It’s always good to have a friend whom would help out in time of needs~

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