doe
in this barren land
a doe crosses her dry home
searching for water.
- xVineyardPKx's blog
- Login or register to post comments
The Poetry Showcase
Share your poems at the Poetry Showcase
xVineyardPKx
Enjoy. If you would like to contact me outside of everypoet.net, my e-mail address is xVineyardPKx@gmail.com.
Recent posts by this user
- not just a matter of preference
- battleground against my will
- there lies mark
- when the music stops
- tough guy
- a cross stick
- everlasting name
- 7-7-7
- spring
- winter
- depths of the mind
- doe
- the head of mark
- god will save this butterfly
- holidays
- relief
- free runners
- spiraling down this hall
- rush
- contrast
- in pride and tradition
- rebellious taoist
- opposite
- it'll visit us in a daydream
- wavelengths
- this arrangement
- i'm sorry
- strong minds
- some day
- does it matter
- peace (dedicated to mrs. hagen)
- i love my shadow
- to be like him
- rose
- what's in a fight?
- why do i try, why did they?
- when a poet drops his poem
- the eternal tao
- the falling action
Archive
- May, 2008 (621)
- April, 2008 (1225)
- March, 2008 (969)
- February, 2008 (919)
- January, 2008 (1026)
Who's online
There are currently 2 users and 4 guests online.
Online users
- exodouso7
- stanwshura
Who's new
- Derryck
- Airborne
- Kubuntu
- stanwshura
- Ubuntu
The Poetry Showcase currently has 1506 members.
Syndicate
nice
I like this haiku. It has that absence of feeling that most haiku do. (Wait, is haiku plural and singular???) It is over simplified and literal, yet has a meaning that would take much to find. Well done. I suggest capitalizing the first line, I haven't seen too many haiku without any capitalization. Totally your choice, though.
reply
huh. to be perfectly honest, i thought i was going crazy when i wrote this and didn't think the poem would actually mirror the feeling i had when i wrote it, but you seemed to have gotten it. thanks for the commentary. i don't typically use capitalization in my poems, however. wait, so should i have not simplified it so much or was that how it should've been done? thanks again
steve
http://xvineyardpkx.bravehost.com
reply to reply!!!!
No, the over simplified word choice and event in the poem make it ingenious! That's the way haiku are supposed to be. God, to be perfectly honest, I always think I'm going crazy...so don't worry about it too much. :)